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Post by ~~Little Maxi~~ on Jun 6, 2006 17:09:42 GMT
This is about Harry and my own Character
Chapter One
Cassie looked down into the pale, white has of her mother. Her mother had requested to see Cassie and the Doctors had agreed. ‘Mother,’ she asked curiously ‘Cassie,’ she said as tried to sit up. ‘Lie down,’ Cassie said as she put a hand on her mothers arm. ‘There’s something I need to tell you,’ ‘Mother it doesn’t-’ ‘Don’t tell me it doesn’t matter Cassie,’ she snapped. She sighed and continued, ‘Cassie, your dad isn’t dead,’ ‘What,’ Cassie shouted jumping up. ‘I thought it was best that you didn’t know about him,’ ‘Why,’ ‘Because he is a wizard,’ ‘A what!’ ‘Come on Cassie use your head, why do you think you can make things happen or talk to serpents,’ as she said the last part, she shivered. ‘Does he…he know about me,’ Cassie asked on the verge of tears. ‘No,’ her mother sighed. ‘Cassie when I die and I will die, I want you to go find him,’ ‘Don…Don’t talk like that,’ Cassie cried. ‘Just promise me you’ll go find him,’ Cassie nodded her head. She looked at her mother and said, ‘Mother how am I meant to find him,’ ‘There’s a box in the attic,’ she whispered. Cassie wiped at her eyes and asked, ‘What..What’s his name,’ her mother looked at her with hazel coloured eyes and sighed, ‘You look a bit like him and his name is Tom Riddle,’ with that her mother closed her eyes and drifted in sleep. A sleep which she wouldn’t wake up from. Cassie burst into tears as the doctors ran into the room.
what do you think
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Post by thrallofwriting on Aug 5, 2007 19:58:51 GMT
I liked it. I'd have liked it more had you spaced out the lined of quotes and such, like a space in between each one, making it easier to read. Otherwise, I have to say I think it has some potential and is cute. Do you intent to continue it or was it a one time attempt to see what you could come up with?
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